Name: Zazume
Age: 16
Birthdate: September 12th
Rank: Genin

Village: Kumogakure
Clan: N/A
Element(s):Raiton, Fuiton 
Specialties: Kenjutsu, Ninjutsu

Special Characteristics:
Name: Invisible Sheathe 
Type: Passive
Description: This technique is more of a skill like the tree climbing or water walking, and not made for battle. it was designed as a means to carry swords (or perhaps other weapons) without concealing it in an actual sheath or occupying the wielders arms. With this technique the used focuses a small amount of chakra to his back, the chakra will make the weapon adhere to the user's back and dull it's edge, making it safer to carry in this way. It does not require hand seals to use and the amount of chakra required to maintain this is minuscule enough to be held for almost indefinite periods of time.




Height: 6 ft 2 inch
Weight: 155
Hair Color: Silver
Eye Color: Blue
General Description: Zazume's hair attracts you almost immediately. It flows down over, covering a little bit above his eyes, and goes down to the first vertebrae in his back. His body type doesn't seem intimidating, besides being decently tall, his frame couldn't be described as neither skinny nor muscular, more like athletic, with an undertone of muscle. On both sides of his back, a tattoo can be found. Stretching from his shoulder blades, to barely above his waist, on one side there is a huge flowing wave, and the other side a series of clouds. His attitude seems determined, yet saddened, almost as if you can sense something horrific has happened to him already in his life. He usually wears long black cloak, streaks of darkish blue and white painted across in long speedy strokes.

Personality: What is your character like?
Zezume's a complicated child, due to a horrific tragedy, his feelings usually come out incorrectly to the people who he cares about. He's always trying to protect everyone, but he doesn't want to be come too attached, he's lost too much, he's trying so hard not to cross his line, that it end's up happening. He has an incredible drive, one which usually causes him problems. He wants to become stronger to protect his friends, and whats left of his family, but it usually causes him to push people away. Hes always trying to do something by himself, not because he doesn't like working as a team, but so no one else is in harm's way. His tattoos represent a lot for him, their his dreams. He knows in himself that he can't slack off, and that he has to do his job as a protector, but he secretly loves the clouds and the waves, their constant motion, their free caring jobs, it makes him so happy to know people can live like that if he does his job. Zezume, despite loving the clouds and waves, is easily upset, he even gets upset at himself for getting upset, he tried to hide it, but it just makes it show more. While he tries to be elusive, he's an open book besides his past, they will be pages that no one can ever read.


Likes: 
Zezume likes many things, which might seem weird according to his demeanor. Something many people don't know about him is, he's a cat guy, just can't get enough of those fur balls! He likes painting in his free time, something about it, painting landscapes (lots and lots of waves and clouds),  it brings him to peace. He spends a lot of time playing games like poker, chess, GO, and more. While he likes a lot of things, theirs not much he says he loves, mostly because of his attachment problems, but even he has something precious in his heart, his sister.


Dislikes: 
He doesn't like loud noises such as dogs barking, or dogs in particular. Zezume is very picky about his food. He can't stand spicy food, or most sweets and treats. He hates thunder storms, they ruin the tranquility of his beautiful clouds, and he hates it when people tell him he do something because he's too young, that pisses him off to no extent. He hates those who brag. Mostly because they aren't strong, hes a firm believer of either your strong and understand your strong, or your weak and should know your place. He isn't one to boast of his strength, so hearing people try to boast when they really aren't impressive makes him feel as if he should set them in their place, but that would be against his beliefs so he stands his ground.


Motivations: 
Zezume's motivation's are clear to him. He wants power, to protect. He knows his role in life, he has to protect his loved ones, he can't stand by and watch anyone else die as he peers on powerless. He also wants to show people that despite his attitude, he cares for them, and wants them to know it, even he has to use his power to show it. His motivation doesn't stem from rivalries, it stems from his need, his need to protect, to feel powerful enough, and to feel safe. Unlike some power hungry ninjas, he knows his power might seem like it could corrupt him, but his sister, his motivation, his life, it keeps him strong to his ninja path, not to that of the corrupted.


Fears:
Zezume feeling powerless, meeting someone who one day he can't ever defeat. His dreams, his goals, all shattered, and all he can do is wait. Also, the pitch black dark, where silence takes over, it terrifies him, him being out of control is killing him, he can't even hope, the pitch black darkness sucks the life out of him. But greater then all, his fear is being lost, he was lost once, not knowing what to do, where to go, until he came upon the Kumogakure ninja, if he were to lose the people of Kumogakure, he would lose himself.


History: Zezume was born in a small town, Himichikawa. It was thundering hard, as if his birth had stirred something, his parents knew he was a Raiton type immediately. Both his parents, previously nin, ran away and started their new lives in Himichikawa, where they had Zezume, and his sister 7 years later, Sasuna. His father made him study as soon as he could read, feeling that he would give his son a great education despite the fact that the town had no formal ninja schooling and training. When Zezume could walk, he immediately was being taught the proper way to run. His father was a respected ninja who grew up a hard life, so it was no surprise that he made Zezume work hard, even when Zezume's mother thought he was overworking his son. Zezume despite constantly working hard, continued to stay motivated to learn more about ninjutsu. By the time he was 8, he felt so strong, he could even create a clone of himself, even his father was impressed by his growth.. It all changed when his parents were murdered, he felt powerless. His training from his father hadn't prepared him for this.


Zezume escaped with his sister, who was only one year old at this time, to a far away bridge, where they gave up. Thats where ninja from the Kumogakure village found him on the way back from a mission. They brought him back, and when he had no where to go, they accepted him and his sister. Immediately Zezume asked how he could become stronger, and his orphanage parents sent him to the ninja academy, where Zezume shined. He worked harder then everyone else on top of his early training with his father, he was the star of his class along with Nikari, his best friend. They were attracted to each other, they just felt a connection, they were both hard workers and wanted to improve. Eventually, Zezume turned 14, became eligible to become a Genin, and applied. His ability to use Raiton jutsu already, and his surprising mastery of the katana, which the people of kumokagure couldn't understand, he was accepted. Zezume, already an accomplished genin, continues to practice hard waiting for his time to test himself at the greatest test of them all, the chunin exams.
 
RP Sample: Zezume awoke, pitch black, his room so far away, but the screaming clearly audible,. He turned on the lights, saw his sister in bed, and turned to his window. He saw two faint flickering reddish orange figures, but he could clearly hear the screams. He dashed to his front door, Zezume tried opening it, for a second he stopped, his brain coming to the realization that this wasn't a smart idea, but he didn't care, and pushed on. Getting closer to the two figures, the screaming was becoming unbearable, but he pressed on, because he could clearly see it was a single man breathing some sort of fire, probably an uchiha, he thought to himself, and the now clearer two figures being subjected to what seemed like torture. Not so far away now, he hid in the trees, as he finally got a clear view, his heart stopped. His mind went blank. The people being burned were his parents. He couldn't see anything but their backs, but the way his father and mother tied their headbands were unique. His parents weren't actually ninjas, they left their villages because of their complicated past. The father being from Hidden Leaf, while the mother being from the village of the Sand. At some point in their lives, their father told them, after working together on many missions, they both felt a connection, but they weren't allowed to be together, so they ran away to live in a land without ninjas. Zezume, he stared, and stared. eventually the flames stopped, and the man continued to speak. "I'm sorry Ren, Nira, but you two have information which when combined, could make the Hidden Leaf the most hated village of them all. Now tell me where is the girl". Zezume, hearing girl, came back to clear thought, he had to get his sister out, what other girl could they be talking about. He ran, and ran, and took her sister from her crib. He cradled her gently, not to wake her, as he ran far and far away. He heard an explosion. He looked back, far enough to barely be able to see that it was his house burning, but close enough to be able to see the shape of the man who did this to his family, Zezume turned his head to look forward, turning his back on his old home. 

Zezume just kept making distance, not sure if the man looking for his sister was coming. After 3 long days, he stopped. He could no longer walk, the constant screaming of his baby sister, the feeling of being lost with no where to go, he collapsed. He awoke to the sounds of a bustling home, confused. Someone shouted, "He's awake!" What are they talking about, Zezume thought. "Hey little guy, wheres your home, we found you and your sister collapsed by the Inagri bridge". Zezume tried to speak, he could barely form his lips to make the correct words he needed, "We have no home now". "Well, welcome to Kumogakure then". The mans formed a huge smile, and Zezume felt safe.


Faceclaim: Riku from Kingdom of Hearts.

Word counts are short in several places.

Personality: 179/200
Likes: 101/100
Dislikes: 64/100
Motivations: 68/100
Fears: 100/100

History: 517/400

You're have to get an image, list the face claim (this can as simple as google images), and post an rp sample before we can go any farther, as well as get the word counts up to minimal requirements.

"Both his parents, previously nin, ran away and started their new lives in Himichikawa"

"His father was a respected S ranked Jounin"

This... kind of contradicts itself. An S-rank Jounin that ran away would instantly be hunted as a missing-nin. It's not a huge deal, but inconsistancies can be dangerous.


"His father, the night before his death handed him a huge scroll. He said he would be leaving soon for a very long time, and to take it, it had a katana within it, that would be summoned upon opening, and it held the techniques of his father."

Mentioning this is fine, however you'll still have to app the weapon and jutsu for moderation, then have them approved. Histories for the characters are there to give them context; however claiming items and the like in them is basically equated to meaning nothing, unless the clan your ninja is from has a free starter item. However, as you're starting technically clanless, you will get to choose between the two clanless freebie options

Quote :

If you choose to start without a clan, you will receive 2D and 1C rank jutsu to start, on top of the normal 5 free jutsu you receive for creating the character. If you wish to take an item instead, you may app 2 D-rank items, or 1 C-rank item.

But that's for later on. Beyond the odd inconsistancies of the history, it's not bad overall.


I went into the app itself to adjust a broken [b] code, and saw that you have a MASSIVE amount of extra coding, beyond just the color change to one section. I don't believe this is your fault, sometimes the board will insert a massive amount of extra coding for no reason. However, the extra coding has to go. The easiest way to do this is just to grab a clean copy of the template and move the information to that without the extra coding. If you can't do this, let an admin know and we'll figure something out.

approved.